Well
I have to agree with my homeboys; tijnn and OPQC :P it's very repetive.. The review with "Gay.." haha made my LOL.
The melody is good, the mastering is.. okay.. not the best, try to use parametic EQ2, reverb, waveshaper etc. just try to look around!
It could be soooo much better..
The repetiveness drives me nuts at 1:30 .. if i heard this more then once i would make suicide xD
Helth
5/5 - Keep it up man!